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Pacing Never Got Me Anywhere by ~Pie-Is-Life:iconPie-Is-Life:



Here I relax again with cigarettes surrounding me.
I long to wonder the shortcoming of infinity.
With tensions high as I’m assigned to swim beyond these banks.
I don’t remember how it feels to fly or why I sank.

It’s like the benches are a home to thieves and sanity.
We’re questioning the piece of beauty we call vanity.
The sound of gravity subsists to weigh inside my veins.
His sounds of claiming hits persist.  Remind me why I came?

We are alone again, outside the glass- outside the doors
as sidewalk preachers sit and cry their lungs out even more.
A sigh- and if you quickly now, ignore their place
They might open up and enlighten you for tempting grace.

Her eyes are weak and damp, which proves she loves her temperance.
The way she dreams has made me doubt the bliss of penitence.
When sleeping stealth becomes a weary chore for tired eyes-
This girl can’t get it right.  She’ll interpret dreams to finalize.

I should’ve seen this trail from a Saturday night long ago.
I should’ve realized then I needed speed to prompt the flow.
Like wind’s invisible- affects the tide in which we breathe.
I wish vision mattered, cause there’s no way I’ll interpret dreams.
©2007-2009 ~Pie-Is-Life
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Author's Comments

I wrote this awhile ago. I added the last bit of it today. Sorry if the transition is not smooth...I've been having trouble with that lately.

The form is a little messed up. I tried to do fourteen syllables in a line, but it didn't really work...

Anyway, this is supposed to be about predetermination. I strongly disagree and think it doesn't exist. If it doesn't come across that way, I'm fine with that. I didn't do a good job expressing myself in this piece.

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:iconprincessofthedishes:
This is a beautiful poem! And you do get your beliefs across, but in the poetic sort of way, which is never direct yet not completely indirect, either. It's really beautiful, the transitions aren't all too smooth, but that's what makes it fit with this idea. Showing that predertermination is too easy, so it can't be possible. I love the way first person is used here, and I don't usually say that. *I usually prefer third person* But here, it works. It's a great piece of writing, don't tell yourself otherwise.

:heart:

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:iconpie-is-life:
Thank you :D
I was never good at transitions. Oh well.
Haha, I like third person too. I think I'm better at writing in third person, but it's hard to show in poetry.

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:iconmurasaki-tori:
Dude. penitence ? Sweet. Totally sweet.
I think you're getting too smart to be my friend. suun EYEZ will bEE noting UNDER STANDINg you're wayz uf TALKIENG. Oh noes!

But in all seriousness, excellent write. So well worded, it flowed without sounding forced ( AKA: The more in love with me you'll FAAAALL >_>; )
This totally should have been in Fire & Ice. <333

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:iconpie-is-life:
Yep. Penitence. :D
Because being around you makes my vocab go :above:
I think Fire and Ice was forced this year. They took that idea from Plain White Tees. >.<

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:iconmurasaki-tori:
Has my pretty vocab mad you a smarter Lindy?
You crazayzay.
Haha xDD DAMN THEM!

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:iconanimefreaktose:
"I wish vision mattered, cause there is no way I’ll interpret dreams. "

LOVE

you are the awesome smexy pirate or poems. I shall call you "Poem Pirate Lindt!!"

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:iconkamera-chan:
That was beautiful! Somewhat depressing when it came to the loss of power and such, but it was a very powerful poem.

*faves*

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:iconpie-is-life:
lol, we will pimp out Fire and Ice next year and people will say "Wow, I wish I was published in something that good. *starry eyed*" And we shall smile because none of our poetry sounds like Peri's. :)

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:iconpie-is-life:
Sank you. :) The Pirate Poet Lindt has a good connection with alliteration. In fact, that's the name of her ship. And the first mate is Always Awesome Alex. :) Yarg.

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